I dont really think you got the meaning of the words across very well for some of the words especially for the word shy its not what i would expect. Sometimes its a good thing though just needs some work.
I think you need to work on scale and work on the "personallity" of the words make shy look like its shy and so on.
You have good rhythm in your piece. My eye goes from shy and guy all the way up to childish
I dont really think you got the meaning of the words across very well for some of the words especially for the word shy its not what i would expect. Sometimes its a good thing though just needs some work.
ReplyDeleteI think you need to work on scale and work on the "personallity" of the words make shy look like its shy and so on.
ReplyDeleteYou have good rhythm in your piece. My eye goes from shy and guy all the way up to childish
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